Dear Diary
A couple days ago I passed the Radley house and I suddenly stopped and looked at what was in the tree. and i found some gum. So i took it and started to chew it. When i got home Jem saw me chewing something and asked me what it was and i said it was gum.He asked where and i said the Radley tree right that second he told me to spit it out because it might be poisons. After that every day i would look in the tree and find random things.Like cards old penny's and soap carvings of people/ Then a couple of days later Nathan Radley found out and plunged the hole with cement. I am assuming he figured out that Boo was giving us things Atticus told us to stop playing our games and that really sucks because i loved playing games with Boo. We also weren't able to get a note to him to ask him to play. It was really scary when Boo took out a shotgun and almost shot us he thought that we were black people trying to break in to his house. Next time he said he would shoot us.
Post #8
15 years ago
Several things. First, I think you should try this cool new thing called paragraphs. Second, I think you could organize your thoughts some more.
ReplyDeleteI think you did well though conveying what was thought by Scout.
Hey Ryan,
ReplyDeletegreat start to your comments, the content is there. Definitely work on organization, as Andy kindly said - using paragraphs, and also include vocabulary. I think the length on all 3 entries are a bit short, I'd like you to expand on your thoughts more.
Thanks!
Mrs. G